I gently rubbed the cotton damped with alcohol on his wrinkled upper arm. Straining my weary eyes, I looked for a vein in the already pale arms. Finally managing to locate one vein camouflaged between the distinct lines of wrinkles, I pierced a sterile needle into his skin. Assured that I had got in deep enough, I began to suck blood into the syringe. Together, the old man and I watched the dark, thick blood rise up the syringe. His glucose level figures for the previous week were fresh in my memory – 150 for fasting and a whopping 310 after a meal. His blood viscosity was thickening as well. I silently prayed for better results this time. Nurses have a soft side that is often overwhelmed by their show of resilience.
Giving him a warm assuring smile, I gently drew the needle out, emptied the contents of the syringe into a labeled test tube. I passed it over to the lab on my way to the maternity section in our hospital. A 4-day infant suffering from jaundice lay half-naked in the phototherapy incubator, the UV light making its yellow skin even brighter. The kid’s forlorn mother tiptoed behind me into the room, waiting for my approval. Medical rules are ones that even an illiterate would seldom fear breaking. She was more than eager to catch a glimpse of the result of her 10-month-long ordeal and breastfeed her kid. I could write stories of the mother’s agony, just by taking a glance at her eyes. They portrayed a desperate craving and anguish of a kind that no egoistic woman would curse another of her breed to suffer.
This wasn’t unusual to me. I waited outside. Once she was done, I guaranteed that her child would be fine and smiled. I had to move on. There was a patient in ward 235 ‘waiting’ to undergo dialysis in the next few minutes. This was going to be her fifth sitting. Another compulsory 3-hour nightmare she was forced to go through by her beloved family. I bet she would have rather wished she had prayed to die a peaceful, painless death instead of praying for her son’s promotion or for an ‘obedient’ daughter-in-law. Just when I completed setting up her dialysis, my senior nurse called for me to report for an emergency labour case.
This has always been one of the most exciting, painful and suspense-filled part of my career. It’s amazing how just a period of few minutes enlightens one to the inevitable truth of nature that life is the most precious gift on earth. I consider it a supreme power - a creation, surpassed only by creation itself. As my heart skipped a beat at the prospect of attending to my 10th labour case of the month, I was stopped by this 12-year old kid who was getting back home after a week-long stay for his acute knee fracture. I stopped in my tracks and gave him a hasty I-have-got-to-rush look.
“I loved the story u told me while plastering my leg yesterday.” He said, giving me a wide naughty grin. I shamelessly reciprocated with a quick smile.
“What do I call u?” He asked me, out-of-the-blue. “Uncle?”
The last glance that I had of his pearly eyes posed the same question that each of one my patients were tempted to ask – whether to call me brother, similar to addressing my female counterparts – sisters.
“Foster Father!” I replied, pecking him on his overgrown hair and sped towards the labour ward.
P.S.: Again, I is not me :D
16 comments:
Opening started dull boring....as it was about to induce a yawn..... wow Prithz magic comes rite into picture.... The opening para was a beauty, the way you have captured that person's feelings
Second para just helps the story to move forward... thatz all.... nothing special here... although it can be termed as good by any other author's standards, by prithz standards this is just ok
Third para sucks...I think during that time... the bored girl in you got the better of the author and at this point the story goes kind of wayward....Probably you forced ur way here to the next part of the story
Fourth para... ah..here arrives Prithz again... When it comes to handling human emotions you are as good as any good author...Just as the story slipped from a good opening to a yawn-inducing story, this one gets the story back on track
And from thereon I shud say...my initial reaction was i cudnt control my laughter....coz....all these lines, i visualized u in that character...and as the story went on most of ur good traits justified my personification of u in that character..and all of a sudden that twist in the tale........evoked laughter.... :) imagine a girl suddenly turning into a guy :)) come on give me a break... :)) I had to read it once more to come up with a complete review.... coz it loooked more like a comical story to me... andha ending paarthu...although i understand ur noble intention....... hhehehe sorry prithzuuu... the way you brought it there.... made it look comical stuff :)
munnadi lam un blog la 1st comment pannina oru butter scotch icecream tharuviye..antha offer innum irukka?? :D
The fact is u know preethzu...after u started writing stories..... ur readership came down.... although u write stories so sooperbly and ur literary sense have improved a lot...... ppl still relish those sweet personal diary kind of posts a lot.... One thing was it was so informal, can relate with what u write maathiri irukkum..other thing is now u started using fundu english la...niraya peru (sometimes including me :D) mirandu poidaranga... :))
Aaha.. Post padikka aarambikkum bodhu 0 comments.. padichittu varradhukkulla 4 commentsa??
Prithz.. Futurela edhaavadhu books ezhudhara maadiri idea irukka? Indha pinnu pindreenga? Awesome writing.. Asathals :)
//whether to call me brother, similar to addressing my female counterparts//
//P.S.: Again, I is not me :D//
Ennadhidhu? Yaaru ungala paathu neenga paiyannanu kettadhu sollunga.. auto anuppiralaam.. (Shyabba.. romba naal kazhichu prithz bloglae oru casual comment ;))
Damn...sema bulb.
And U started writing twisters as well. I knew U write emotional stories....but didnt expect this from you.
"I could write stories of the mother’s agony, just by taking a glance at her eyes."
U sure can gal :-)
"It’s amazing how just a period of few minutes enlightens one to the inevitable truth of nature that life is the most precious gift on earth"
How true and heartfelt.
I donno about the rest...but I think you are becoming better and better writer with each post...like old wine :P.
Your old posts which were diary types sure were good...but I feel that they hampered the author inside you who wanted to express not only herself but also the ones around her.
And....U are doing it here effortlessly...which makes me wonder...what are you going to write next?????
>>I donno about the rest...but I think you are becoming better and better writer with each post...like old wine :P.
annae vanakkam...prithzu does get better and better with each post.... the way she thinks, the way she twists...... She never failed to surprise me inspite of me taking care not to get surprised......
but one thing.. still the quality is good if u compare with any one else.. but compare with her own previous writings... i think with the previous post and in glimpses of this post..... she has got into a loop... prithzu story na certain things gets repeated ngra range ku irukku.... thatz what i am trying to point out.... :)
hey prithz... wow.. you have turned into a superb short story writer.. keep it up.. i read all your short stories and they are great.. :-)
regarding this story, the initial narration about the feeling of a nurse was great.. somehow the character had too much feminine touch and the "uncle" in the end was a twist.. may be you did not visualize that when you wrote the initial part.. "P.S.: Again, I is not me :D" reiterates this..
first timer here... it is a nice story :)
well written... i hope you become book author in future.. ofcourse will claim to know you among friends..;~)
nice! somehow I can't seem to find any other adjective after reading your posts ;-))Male nurses are a rarity.However,departing from the melancholy tone of ur post,the first thing that comes to my mind on reading the last line of your post was Guy Focker ;-) [ hope u've seen Meet the parents and the sequel.]
oh wow... nice post... really captured the moment.. very very well written!!!
:-) good one
complan...kadisila ipdi twist panren solitu unaku french beard vachu paaka vachita :D i was imagining u as ur "I" anyways..interesting story...nee oruthi thaan mini budgetla kuda hifi story solra..namma oor nursing home setupku konjam ezhuthen :D epvoum SCRUBS, BOSTON LEAGUE rangeukay ezhutare :d
@ rsubras:
Yeabba! Edho Rotten Tomatoes review maadiri irunthuthu :D
Butterscotch icecream dhaane! Next time chennai vandha vaangitharen :D Anna thangai ku vaangi kodukanum nyaya padi :D
@ g3:
Hehe! Ore aalu comment dhan. Neenga rendu perum ennoda comment count inc pannunum nu mudividula irukinga polarku :D
@ Harish:
Pazhaka dhosham! Thothindruthu :D
>>Old wine<< - Hehe! Mabbu etharthuku idhulaam thevai illai ennaku :P
Next post up! Chkungo :D
@ venkatesh:
Hey!!! How r u? Long time man! U really had the patience to read them all huh? Tks a ton! U made my day! Seriously!
@ chumma:
Tks!
@iamyuva:
Haha! Dunno which road i am goin to take myself :D
@ sangs:
Hehehe! I havn't seen that movie as yet! Will watch it jus to connect to ur comment :D
@ preethzzz:
Tks! :)
@ nandoo:
Tks! Turn edhuthu comment podringalo? :P
@ gils:
Hehehe! Ellam andha madiri serial paatha eppect :D
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