Monday, August 11, 2008

She - Part II

His heart pounded in sync with her swift, confident steps as he watched her climb. Her thin legs carried her up the ladder.


Higher and higher.


Further and further away from him.


He stood here, at the foot of the ladder. His neck strained at the burden of the head looking up at her. He was unaware of how tightly his fingers were clinched around the bars of the ladder, as if they might crumble under his daughter’s weight.


Reaching the top, she called out to him. Her flimsy arms waving out to him in delight. He smiled back at her - a smile that struggled to strike a balance between joy and hidden fear. Joyful of her happiness. Fearful of watching her at a distance beyond his own arm’s length.


She began her slide down. Coming closer to him.


Closer and Closer.


Landing hard on the sandy ground, she resurged onto her feet to climb back on the ladder for her next slide. His fingers just managed to skim past her slender arms as she ran away once again.


He felt out of control – out of control over his own emotions. His over protectiveness was turning into a burden on himself. It wouldn’t be long before she feels the same, he thought.


Not long.


To be continued...


8 comments:

Anonymous said...

".......His over protectiveness was turning into a burden on himself...." well said - wonderful - HOW TRUE !!

Dimplicious said...

/His fingers just managed to skim past her slender arms as she ran away once again./

So beautiful to imagine this..

/His over protectiveness was turning into a burden on himself. It wouldn’t be long before she feels the same, he thought./

No words...!!!So true...

gils said...

hahahaha....adutha parta seekram podu :D :D LOL

Subramanian Ramachandran said...

first part pona podhu nu othukkalam... but intha maathiri paragraph lam oru part nu othukkave mudiyaathu...... Foul....Foul :)

I second whatever your dad has said.......those are wonderful lines....... but in general, guys show their love by being over protective... :)

Vidya Natarajan said...

well thts the gamut of emotions u feel for a vulnerable child
not knowing whether to over protect and cocoon u or to let u fly free!

Venkatesh said...

nicely narrated once again..

Harish said...

Hmm....guess....this is a very small part.

But yeah...u maintained the flow throughout as usual.

Its a nice vision of a father and how he feels about his daughter. And yeah....the same opinion as the rest...that line was AWESOME.

Just sheer poetry. :-)

Waiting for the last part.

prithz said...

@ appa:
Sad but very true :(

@ dimplicious:
Thanks lady :)

@ gils:
Potaachu :)

@ rsubras:
My game. My rules :D

@ vidya natarajan:
Yep :(

@ venkatesh:
Danks maadi :)

@ harish:
Danku :D Well, i'll wrap it up in 2 more parts. :D