She walked another step closer to him, bending down to whisper into his ears, her long hair falling on his shoulders like a blanket. The warm air that she breathed out along with the cold touch of her earring on his neck tickled him. He loved it when she murmured secrets into his ears – it seemed to strengthen his faith, the faith that she trusted him more than she trusted keeping the secret to herself.
He felt a protective aura cloak him as she held his hand in hers – a feeling of security as if nothing in this world could harm him – not even the sickness that was troubling him now.
Nothing.
It was a unique feeling which otherwise only his mother could have made him feel.
Like grey clouds before a rain, her face was changing colour. He saw the tears pooling in her lower eyelids - waiting impatiently to muster one more drop so that they could surrender to the gravity that the slope of her cheek bones had to offer. The tears shone in her eyes, synonymous to the glimmering silver lining of every cloud.
Finally, nature succumbed to do her part. The lightening sincerely struck before the thunder.
Her teary eyes spoke before her voice did.
To be concluded...
9 comments:
/her long hair falling on his shoulders like a blanket./
One gud imagination u have got...seriously!!!
/He saw the tears pooling in her lower eyelids - waiting impatiently to muster one more drop so that they could surrender to the gravity that the slope of her cheek bones had to offer/
prithz's touch!!The silver lining in this post
Just read one of your comments for the post "She part-II"..R u seriously planning to wind it up after this part??
Hi
naan than firstu!
well
"Like grey clouds before a rain, her face was changing colour. He saw the tears pooling in her lower eyelids - waiting impatiently to muster one more drop so that they could surrender to the gravity that the slope of her cheek bones had to offer."
such descriptive riting!
u r so damn gud!
am waiting to see how u r gonna continue!
will there be twists and turns!
lemme wait and watch :)
it is so beautiful and the narration is awesome.......
but i have a ishmall problem... ennathan flow sooper ah irunthalum..since this is coming in parts..... cut panni cut panni flow semmaiya interrupt aaguthu..it is like watching a grand movie with so many ad breaks... :)
oru small suggestion: final part podumbothu atleast couple everything and post it entirely so that it not only looks sweet but also beautifully flowing story :)
you got some beautiful analogies in this part.. nicely thought through and beautifully expressed.. keep it up..
dialogey ialama ivlo cutea ezhutha unala matum than mudiyum :)) nice writeup :)
knock..knock..final part pending...sekiram podunga :)
"He loved it when she murmured secrets into his ears – it seemed to strengthen his faith, the faith that she trusted him more than she trusted keeping the secret to herself."
WOW. It is like...u weave a web of magic in ur writing and serenade us. I guess every father feels the same way with their daughters.
"Her teary eyes spoke before her voice did."
I mean...just because i quote this does not mean that I like this alone...but then..this is best among the rest.
Seriously...tell me what do u eat before u write something :P
@ dimplicious:
Thanks :)
Closing this series with the 4th part :)
@ zanychild:
Thanks :)
@ rsubras:
Thanks. Will try your suggestion. :)
@ venkatesh:
Thank you :)
@ gils:
Hehe :)
@ harish:
Hehe! You really want to know? :P
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